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Here is something I wrote for a class and got a B on itA Short Story
Okay so the first thing I will tell you is a story of one of my visits to the psych ward. So my first trip to the psych ward was pretty scary. But I was only there for two weeks. By my third trip I was already used to the entry system in the emergency room but i was going to a new facility called Hampstead Hospital. I was put onto the washington unit. Yes, the units were named after presidents. I made some short term friends with my roommates while I was there for six weeks. I was put onto some new medication and everything went well. Yes, I had snapped a few times but I felt safe. I was later diagnosed with severe depressive disorder with psychotic tendencies. The psychotic tendencies were hallucinations so I was seeing and hearing things that weren't actually there.
Questions and answers
Alright let’s answer some questions. Do violent people go to these places? Yes, some violent people go to these places because they need the help too. Do you have a set schedule that you follow everyday? Yes we do have a set schedule we follow everyday. Mine went from 8 AM to 8 PM. Are you allowed to use phones/computers? In some places yes but the facility I went to we were not allowed to use electronic devices. What do you do if you have school? They will have work for you to do while you are there or you will get a tutor to help you with your work once you leave.
Remember This
So from what you guys have heard it sounds like a vacation, right? But we all need to remember that if we don't need to go to stay home. People go to these places to be put onto the right medications they need and to get the help that they need. If you go to one and you don’t need the help you're taking away spaces from people that actually need the help.
So what I want you guys to realize is that psych wards aren’t bad but don’t go to one unless needed. When you stay at one of these places a person gets a new start as a better them or a better outlook towards life.
something I wrote my freshman year
Talons of Chaos
Written by NightShade and Sunshine
Art/Drawings by Sunshine
Five young dragonets, One undeniable, Risky, Legendary future. Can they put their land at peace as it once was or will the tribes fall beneath deaths talons? This is the morning of the end of life, can these young dragonets save the continent before disaster strikes?
The prophecy:The land is soaked in blood and dead corpses are in the mud,Their tears flood the earth, their safety is ensured by a birth,those who are strong and true may save the land,to fulfill a prophecy this grand soldiers of all tribes search the land,a mark of a paw upon thy neck,now save the land and resurrect.
Species of dragons
SunHorns:Any shade of yellow, orange, white, light Gray, or gold and very rarely red.
Only known abilities are, sources, heated scales, They have hidden spikes on the weaker parts of their body like their tail and stomach, being able to burn dragons with their touch if angered or on command.
Queen:Sunrise
GlassHorns:Clear, white and any shade of metallic blue. Can use their horns (If clear) to blind enemies, camouflage, can also heal quicker than other dragons, their claws are extremely sharp, and they can breath out shards of glass-like spikes.
MoonHorns:Black,light gray, gray,any shade purple, green, or dark red. Moon horns can breathe fire and communicate using the stars, they can also somewhat see into the future, Power strength depends on the moon phase.
Queen:NightShadow
RubyHorns: any shade of Red,orange,neon yellow,blue,pink,or purple. Only known powers are sources and they spit lava/melted gems that can burn enemies.
WarmHorns:Rainbow/can be any color(s),they are really shiny and can mimic other scale colors, as well as voices. They are furry instead of the typical scales they do however have some scales underneath their fur along with venomous scale-like spikes. Only known powers or abilities are camouflage, spikes and mimicking voices. Their the dragons who care most about their appearance.
Queen:Tropical
MindHorns:light gray,black,dark red and very rarely white.
LandHorns:any shade of pale green,dark green,and brown.
RoseHorns:light red,metallic green,pale pink, white, blue,and indigo.
WaterHorns:Light blue,dark blue,pale blue,light green,purple,and turquoise.
Queen:Skylin
DirtHorns:Brown,dark brown,light brown, red brown, and very rarely shades of green.
*Prologue*
Dark Shadow
Fire
It was late when our homes had caught fire, we watched it all burn down until all that was left was a pile of ash. We slept on the ground that night.
It was cold, but everyone was thankful nobody got severely hurt.
I was ashamed, I knew who set the town on fire but, Couldn't bare to tell the queen. She’d have him killed, I couldn't let the father of my dragonet be hunted without even getting a glimpse of her.
But after all he had caused a wild fire and left his family to sleep on cold dirt.
Before he had ran back to his tribe I saw him light the fire.
He looked ashamed that he burned down my cabin.
Even a little pity showed through his shattered emotions, I felt sympathy for him even though he almost caused millions of deaths. Even if I did tell the Queen, would she understand the situation I'm in?, something in my gut answered that question with an uneasy rumble.
She couldn't ever understand what I'm going through. It was early in the morning when i woke up to get breakfast i found fish, berries, and birds, but then i found Innermind the father of my dragonet standing there innocently, his tail curled into a heart “I missed you'' he claimed
� you burned down my cabin and my town!� I poked his snout with my claw “I'm sorry..�
he begged his voice trailing off “you ruined our home!�
I pointed at the egg, he glanced at it then looked down at the ground.
“You can live with me.�
he said looking up “and why should we!� I insisted my wings flaring open, hitting a branch in the process.
“So you don't have to sleep on the ground.� he muttered. “Is it…warm there?� I grabbed my egg “yes� he grinned a bit.
“Fine� I spread my wings wider and flew into the air with him with the Egg in my talons. “So when will she hatch?� he glared at the egg. � In two days� I secured the egg.
“Wow� , his eyes now wide. “Well since she's going to hatch soon shouldn't we run through names?� he looked into my eyes, “i already have one in mind� I smiled.
“It's Nighthound�
I came closer to him “perfect�
*Chapter 1*
Magic
Nighthound
Being a 4 year old dragonet is an easy task unless you're a source like me, every mindhorn source has a lot to do but also being
a mindhorn and a moonhorn source is even worse.
More chores and meetings with the queen, which is miserable but oddly entertaining.
The queen has always talked about meetings with queen tropical and how they have such colorful prey. She described it as a “party platter mix with rainbows and flowers.�
it never made sense to me though i never knew what a flower was.
My Mother ate one because my Father brought it to her. She said it tasted like mango.
And I thought about the bitter sweet taste of a ripe mango but that thought ended when I heard the loud clang of the queen's jewelry.
“Ah Nighthound your here�
the Queen folded her wings in a proper way and glared down at me, expanding her neck.
Which was sparkling with diamonds and amethysts.
“Nighthound you'll be training a rubyhorn source� the Queen smiled her teeth so shiny they almost blinded me.
“I'm what?� I bared mine “a rubyhorn?� a low growl faded from my throat “yes� the Queen's wings sparkled in the sun as if two amethysts drowning in a milky way.
”And it's a male rubyhorn� she said almost sounding thrilled.�
“Name� I grabbed an empty scroll “Gemstone oh and he reads minds!� she said, tossing my scroll into a pile of stone in the corner of the castle room, the walls lined with pearls from queen skylin.
“He is very kind and he’s queen jewels son� the queen leaped over a pile of gold “someone pick this up� she frowned a tint of frustration in her voice.
“Anyway, your training him because he can't control his magic properly�
The queen gazed at the wall filled with scales from titanus, her former king who was killed by an eel. After that queen skylin had all eels executed.
The queen tripped over a dragonet, the dragonet squealed as the queen rolled over it “ack!� the queen hit her head on the wall. “I'm sorry�.my queen� it used its wing to cover its face scared she’d have it killed.
“It's okay� the queen got up, helped the dragonet up, and shrugged.
The dragonet slipped away.
Queen violin had manors unlike most dragon's her age.
“He’ll be here by morning� she went on looking down at the ground as she went waiting for another dragonet to arrive.
She walked to her throne room and I went to my room.
I fell on my hanging bed, wrote in my scroll and fell asleep.
I woke up to the smell of cooked fish hovering in the air letting the smell guide me to the kitchen.
It was a strong smell, in fact it pulled me towards it.
Not only did it take me to the fish but it led me to a red shiny dragon named gemstone “hi� i said looking around awkwardly.
my eyes searched the room, and there it was the scroll with all my information in it.
And he saw it too with a grin on his face.
*Chapter 2*
Banished
Antlers
I stood on the ground below the castle, knowing what it feels like to be a scavenger. I had never been invited to the castle, queen sunrise had never called me to the place, and I was never needed anyway.
I curled my tail and slipped into the doorway to the inside of the castle, the queen stood there a pale yellow over her snout and tail.
light orange painted over her like a drizzle of honey.
“ahhh�.Antlers. Have you seen siria?�
The queen's glare sent heated waves of intensity towards me.
And I shiver at the thought of being banished from the kingdom.
Which would mean no seeing siria,
no roasted lizards, No more flying!
oh what a mess i’d be.
”No your majesty I have not� I said avoiding eye contact knowing she’ll catch my lie. Siria had asked me to not tell anyone I saw her as she was trying to get away from her mothers grasp and actually explore the kingdom.
“So be it. Guards escort him outside� the queen lashed her tail at the painting on the wall. I gulped and a shock of being watched hit me and I ran for it. The guards chased me. I flew into the air and my talons held my only way of talking to siria but then a guard caught up to me and grabbed something CLANG. I fell to the ground still running and escaped before I was caught.
Written by NightShade and Sunshine
Art/Drawings by Sunshine
Five young dragonets, One undeniable, Risky, Legendary future. Can they put their land at peace as it once was or will the tribes fall beneath deaths talons? This is the morning of the end of life, can these young dragonets save the continent before disaster strikes?
The prophecy:The land is soaked in blood and dead corpses are in the mud,Their tears flood the earth, their safety is ensured by a birth,those who are strong and true may save the land,to fulfill a prophecy this grand soldiers of all tribes search the land,a mark of a paw upon thy neck,now save the land and resurrect.
Species of dragons
SunHorns:Any shade of yellow, orange, white, light Gray, or gold and very rarely red.
Only known abilities are, sources, heated scales, They have hidden spikes on the weaker parts of their body like their tail and stomach, being able to burn dragons with their touch if angered or on command.
Queen:Sunrise
GlassHorns:Clear, white and any shade of metallic blue. Can use their horns (If clear) to blind enemies, camouflage, can also heal quicker than other dragons, their claws are extremely sharp, and they can breath out shards of glass-like spikes.
MoonHorns:Black,light gray, gray,any shade purple, green, or dark red. Moon horns can breathe fire and communicate using the stars, they can also somewhat see into the future, Power strength depends on the moon phase.
Queen:NightShadow
RubyHorns: any shade of Red,orange,neon yellow,blue,pink,or purple. Only known powers are sources and they spit lava/melted gems that can burn enemies.
WarmHorns:Rainbow/can be any color(s),they are really shiny and can mimic other scale colors, as well as voices. They are furry instead of the typical scales they do however have some scales underneath their fur along with venomous scale-like spikes. Only known powers or abilities are camouflage, spikes and mimicking voices. Their the dragons who care most about their appearance.
Queen:Tropical
MindHorns:light gray,black,dark red and very rarely white.
LandHorns:any shade of pale green,dark green,and brown.
RoseHorns:light red,metallic green,pale pink, white, blue,and indigo.
WaterHorns:Light blue,dark blue,pale blue,light green,purple,and turquoise.
Queen:Skylin
DirtHorns:Brown,dark brown,light brown, red brown, and very rarely shades of green.
*Prologue*
Dark Shadow
Fire
It was late when our homes had caught fire, we watched it all burn down until all that was left was a pile of ash. We slept on the ground that night.
It was cold, but everyone was thankful nobody got severely hurt.
I was ashamed, I knew who set the town on fire but, Couldn't bare to tell the queen. She’d have him killed, I couldn't let the father of my dragonet be hunted without even getting a glimpse of her.
But after all he had caused a wild fire and left his family to sleep on cold dirt.
Before he had ran back to his tribe I saw him light the fire.
He looked ashamed that he burned down my cabin.
Even a little pity showed through his shattered emotions, I felt sympathy for him even though he almost caused millions of deaths. Even if I did tell the Queen, would she understand the situation I'm in?, something in my gut answered that question with an uneasy rumble.
She couldn't ever understand what I'm going through. It was early in the morning when i woke up to get breakfast i found fish, berries, and birds, but then i found Innermind the father of my dragonet standing there innocently, his tail curled into a heart “I missed you'' he claimed
� you burned down my cabin and my town!� I poked his snout with my claw “I'm sorry..�
he begged his voice trailing off “you ruined our home!�
I pointed at the egg, he glanced at it then looked down at the ground.
“You can live with me.�
he said looking up “and why should we!� I insisted my wings flaring open, hitting a branch in the process.
“So you don't have to sleep on the ground.� he muttered. “Is it…warm there?� I grabbed my egg “yes� he grinned a bit.
“Fine� I spread my wings wider and flew into the air with him with the Egg in my talons. “So when will she hatch?� he glared at the egg. � In two days� I secured the egg.
“Wow� , his eyes now wide. “Well since she's going to hatch soon shouldn't we run through names?� he looked into my eyes, “i already have one in mind� I smiled.
“It's Nighthound�
I came closer to him “perfect�
*Chapter 1*
Magic
Nighthound
Being a 4 year old dragonet is an easy task unless you're a source like me, every mindhorn source has a lot to do but also being
a mindhorn and a moonhorn source is even worse.
More chores and meetings with the queen, which is miserable but oddly entertaining.
The queen has always talked about meetings with queen tropical and how they have such colorful prey. She described it as a “party platter mix with rainbows and flowers.�
it never made sense to me though i never knew what a flower was.
My Mother ate one because my Father brought it to her. She said it tasted like mango.
And I thought about the bitter sweet taste of a ripe mango but that thought ended when I heard the loud clang of the queen's jewelry.
“Ah Nighthound your here�
the Queen folded her wings in a proper way and glared down at me, expanding her neck.
Which was sparkling with diamonds and amethysts.
“Nighthound you'll be training a rubyhorn source� the Queen smiled her teeth so shiny they almost blinded me.
“I'm what?� I bared mine “a rubyhorn?� a low growl faded from my throat “yes� the Queen's wings sparkled in the sun as if two amethysts drowning in a milky way.
”And it's a male rubyhorn� she said almost sounding thrilled.�
“Name� I grabbed an empty scroll “Gemstone oh and he reads minds!� she said, tossing my scroll into a pile of stone in the corner of the castle room, the walls lined with pearls from queen skylin.
“He is very kind and he’s queen jewels son� the queen leaped over a pile of gold “someone pick this up� she frowned a tint of frustration in her voice.
“Anyway, your training him because he can't control his magic properly�
The queen gazed at the wall filled with scales from titanus, her former king who was killed by an eel. After that queen skylin had all eels executed.
The queen tripped over a dragonet, the dragonet squealed as the queen rolled over it “ack!� the queen hit her head on the wall. “I'm sorry�.my queen� it used its wing to cover its face scared she’d have it killed.
“It's okay� the queen got up, helped the dragonet up, and shrugged.
The dragonet slipped away.
Queen violin had manors unlike most dragon's her age.
“He’ll be here by morning� she went on looking down at the ground as she went waiting for another dragonet to arrive.
She walked to her throne room and I went to my room.
I fell on my hanging bed, wrote in my scroll and fell asleep.
I woke up to the smell of cooked fish hovering in the air letting the smell guide me to the kitchen.
It was a strong smell, in fact it pulled me towards it.
Not only did it take me to the fish but it led me to a red shiny dragon named gemstone “hi� i said looking around awkwardly.
my eyes searched the room, and there it was the scroll with all my information in it.
And he saw it too with a grin on his face.
*Chapter 2*
Banished
Antlers
I stood on the ground below the castle, knowing what it feels like to be a scavenger. I had never been invited to the castle, queen sunrise had never called me to the place, and I was never needed anyway.
I curled my tail and slipped into the doorway to the inside of the castle, the queen stood there a pale yellow over her snout and tail.
light orange painted over her like a drizzle of honey.
“ahhh�.Antlers. Have you seen siria?�
The queen's glare sent heated waves of intensity towards me.
And I shiver at the thought of being banished from the kingdom.
Which would mean no seeing siria,
no roasted lizards, No more flying!
oh what a mess i’d be.
”No your majesty I have not� I said avoiding eye contact knowing she’ll catch my lie. Siria had asked me to not tell anyone I saw her as she was trying to get away from her mothers grasp and actually explore the kingdom.
“So be it. Guards escort him outside� the queen lashed her tail at the painting on the wall. I gulped and a shock of being watched hit me and I ran for it. The guards chased me. I flew into the air and my talons held my only way of talking to siria but then a guard caught up to me and grabbed something CLANG. I fell to the ground still running and escaped before I was caught.
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ooo I am. I am gonna be sharing something I am writing rn
by the way would you guys be interested in buying the book if can get it published?
yes I just need to get the money
Hi my name is Asher. I am first going to start off with trigger warnings which are: Sexual Assault, Suicide, Self Harm, Mental Abuse, Needles, Psych Wards, and Swearing. This story will be sad but it's about everything I had gone through. But let's get to know me better before I get into the deep stuff. I am a 15 almost 16 year old student at Winnacunnet High School in New Hampshire. My birthday is April 14th, 2007 and that means my Sun sign is an Aries, my moon sign is an Aries, and my rising sign is Cancer. I have Aspergers which is a high functioning autism, ADHD/ADD, Unspecified Bipolar Disorder, Generalized Anxiety and PTSD. Let's start off from when I was little. I don’t remember my age but my father possibly raped me when I was a toddler. He ended up going to jail once I was 3. I haven’t seen him since, which is sad but I am really happy about that. Let’s go back to when I was about 9 months old, which is sad. I remember this and not much of my childhood. So when I was 9 months old I went to get my vaccines well I had like a lot of people holding me down which is scary being fucking 9 months old. So I got the vaccines in my thighs which is normal but one of the shots went too deep. Let's just say I wore white shorts and they were the color pink with my blood after the wash.
Now let’s go to when I was living in Portsmouth, New Hampshire from when I was 5 to 10 years old. I lived in an apartment building right by a highway. Well the first bus driver I had was amazing but the second one not so much. The second bus driver I don’t remember what grade but he dropped me off right by the highway and I was freaking out. I was also bullied all throughout elementary, a little bit in middle school and now high school. I ended up being hospitalized in the second grade for mental health and was diagnosed with Depression and Anxiety. Later on in 4th grade I had enough of the bullying and threatened to punch a girl in the face for calling me a baby for sleeping with a baby toy that is a comfort object for me. Earlier that year I made a lie about my gym teacher that she told me “Get your motherfucking inhaler you fucker� or something like that. I ended up leaving and going to where I live now.
Alright time for middle school. I started dating in middle school with my first girlfriend. I was in sixth grade and she was in fifth. There were bomb threats, kids threatening to shoot up the school ect. Let’s get to the worse part. Seventh grade is when covid hits for me. I went to remote in March if I remember correctly. By the end of the school year was my first psych visit. Going into eighth grade I had two others. There wasn’t much going on at this time.
Alright first time let's talk about that. I went to Anna Jaques Psychiatric Hospital for minors. I was there for two weeks in a really bad mental state. They discharged me too soon after I went back not long after. Second time I was there I was only there for a week due to them thinking I was faking it. My third visit for my middle school year I was at Hampstead Hospital for six weeks. It was traumatizing. My roommate threatened to suffocate me in my sleep because slenderman, I was sexually harassed, I saw my roommate then the 11 year old who sexually harassed me overdosed on tylenol, and I almost saw a kid get killed. Sadly violence was our entertainment at Hampstead. I did also scratch my upper arm until I bled while at Hampstead due to a breakdown. That's all I can remember right now.
warning read trigger warnings
thats my autobiography that I am writing
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MoonKitty wrote: "okay! thx!"your welcome i need more books to make it too 200
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Of course
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thank you. I am trying to get into a creative writing class
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In the dark I’m so alone waiting for the dawn to set me free
When I see him I will know yes I will see his eyes
Shining starlets in the morning sun
Smiling with the dawning day I know he’s the one
Who will take my breath away
That’s first chorus and verse I have recorded the song
Thank you so much. I don't write often so that means alot
I love writing maybe we could make a book together i'm very easy to work with and take up any ideas
Sounds good. I am actually taking a creative writing class next year so my Junior year
I could make a document just need your email!
alright could I pm it to you
ya its perfectly fine just gonna use my main and not my school
private message. I don't want me email out in topics and all that
oh okay yeah you can idk how to send one tho
alright thats fine I am just gonna friend you first
so you can send it cause idk how to :l
MoonKitty wrote: "Sure!"Thanks for your interest. Judging from your profile picture, you might enjoy this one.
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Cat lovers rejoice! At last there is a book testifying to the intellectual superiority of cats. That being said, "The Dreams of Gerontius" is not a book about cats. It's a book with cats in it, about the human experience and how we often become stuck, by our own habits and a lack of spiritual energy, into living a life that is not our best life. - Wendy Schultz, Placerville Mountain Democrat.
The Dreams of Gerontius
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MoonKitty wrote: "CATSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS"Cats are truly special! In this book we get a glimpse into all nine of Gerontius’s lives.
ooooooooooo how did you publish the book?
MoonKitty wrote: "ooooooooooo how did you publish the book?"We published through Amazon Kindle Direct Publishing (KDP). We have versions out in kindle, paperback and hardcover. (I say we - I’m the writer and my wife is my editor and publisher.) If you’re thinking of publishing, the platform is reasonably easy to use, with lots of how to and help articles.
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Deity World wrote: "That’s very useful your wife is publisher and editor least you don’t have to pay for one"She also learned photoshop to do the covers on three of my books!
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Deity World wrote: "O wow awesome I’m a photographer too and love blending images and making them 3d I’ve made a blog"Very cool. Do you have a link for your blog?
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Very cool. Do you have a link for your blog?"
Yes I do I’ll message you
cause we need on for our book cover
MoonKitty wrote: "can you draw dragons??"Sorry, drawing is not my thing. My book covers were done from photos.
thats fine,and it is pretty handy to have a editor my friend is my editor but she also helps with the book when i dont have time to
